tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8433985884370686932.post1999373773985468262..comments2024-03-14T19:35:28.097+08:00Comments on Locky's English Playground: Business Writing: How to write like a pro? -- Part 0Lockyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01561409573657939742noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8433985884370686932.post-24425606353249590272010-11-16T00:23:43.917+08:002010-11-16T00:23:43.917+08:00Yeah, you are right Mei. And the rest of you, hope...Yeah, you are right Mei. And the rest of you, hope you have read Part 1.Lockyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01561409573657939742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8433985884370686932.post-85104803239555646422010-11-15T22:15:35.121+08:002010-11-15T22:15:35.121+08:00Hi,Locky,
It's no doubt that version 2 is mor...Hi,Locky,<br /><br />It's no doubt that version 2 is more professional as the editor used smart participial adjective/phrases (ing form) to describle and report the event. <br /><br />Thanks,<br />MeiAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8433985884370686932.post-36969344223240668782010-11-12T09:19:29.291+08:002010-11-12T09:19:29.291+08:00I think the version 2 was professional. Because In...I think the version 2 was professional. Because In version 2 the subject "A parcel" was drew the attention what happen of a parcel.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8433985884370686932.post-42257881627363186372010-11-12T00:38:52.814+08:002010-11-12T00:38:52.814+08:00Version 2 is more pofessional.
In version 1, the ...Version 2 is more pofessional.<br /><br />In version 1, the sentance structure is Chinese style, so poor sentance structure.<br />In version 2, it doesn't use any Linking verbs, only one verb (i guess) in the sentance, others all are Gerunds. Besides, the words in the version 2 are used more vivid than the version 1.<br />Using Phrase, Gerund and Infinite will make your writing become more professional(i guess).<br /><br />It's cool if i can master the version 2 and become more professional in human language =)Celiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352023372183942432noreply@blogger.com